articles
Blank outline
citing Text Evidence
complex commentary
Commentary does 3 things:
1) Connects the evidence to the claim
2) Explains the evidence
3) Provides the significance of the evidence
Answer these questions to lead to well-written grade level commentary.
*** The importance of because … just a starter!
1) How could you RE-EXPLAIN the evidence?
2) What is ESPECIALLY important about the evidence?
3) How does the evidence PROVE the claim?
4) What NEW point can you make about the claim using THIS evidence?
5) What does THIS evidence reveal about your claim that the other evidence does not?
1) Connects the evidence to the claim
2) Explains the evidence
3) Provides the significance of the evidence
Answer these questions to lead to well-written grade level commentary.
*** The importance of because … just a starter!
1) How could you RE-EXPLAIN the evidence?
2) What is ESPECIALLY important about the evidence?
3) How does the evidence PROVE the claim?
4) What NEW point can you make about the claim using THIS evidence?
5) What does THIS evidence reveal about your claim that the other evidence does not?
How do I start writing commentary?
evidence type + is important because + strong verb ... finish sentence
Example: This data is important because it illustrates the need for school vouchers in intercity schools.
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conclusion
Sneaking food into a theater is the wrong choice; it can cause ticket prices to increase, it is disorderly conduct, and despite popular belief, barely saves patrons any money. With all this said, it is a no-brainer that everyone should stop smuggling snacks into the movies as it is wrong and disrespectful to the movie theater owners. Without the revenue from concession it is very likely that many theaters across the country would have to significantly increase the cost of their tickets and/or close their doors for good. Therefore, people need to support their local theater by simply doing what is right; buy snacks at the counter and enjoy the movie!
counterclaim
final copies
Introduction
Background - italics
Thesis - bold the three main points and either not true or other options
Body Paragraphs
Topic sentence - italics
Evidence - underline and indicate [factual or anecdotal AND pathos, logos, ethos, kairos, big names]
Concluding sentence - italics
Conclusion
Thesis - bold the three main points and either not true or other options
Call to Action - underline
Background - italics
Thesis - bold the three main points and either not true or other options
Body Paragraphs
Topic sentence - italics
Evidence - underline and indicate [factual or anecdotal AND pathos, logos, ethos, kairos, big names]
Concluding sentence - italics
Conclusion
Thesis - bold the three main points and either not true or other options
Call to Action - underline
guided outline
introduction
BACKGROUND Information - SAMPLE
The movie industry hit its height of popularity during the roaring 1920s. This particular time period was actually called the “Golden Age” of Hollywood. Because many American’s were experiencing the ramifications of the Great Depression, a trip to the movies was an especially great way to escape the headaches and worries of this difficult time period. Part of the “movie going” experience was to be able to enjoy an ice-cold Coca-Cola and a big bag of buttery popcorn. Movie theater owners took notice, and over time, they steadily increased the availability and prices of their concession stand items. Many people would even say their prices have skyrocketed! As a result, numerous movie goers have resorted to feeling the need to sneak in their own snacks because they are simply unwilling to pay such outrageous prices. Consequently, this has created quite a controversy.
The movie industry hit its height of popularity during the roaring 1920s. This particular time period was actually called the “Golden Age” of Hollywood. Because many American’s were experiencing the ramifications of the Great Depression, a trip to the movies was an especially great way to escape the headaches and worries of this difficult time period. Part of the “movie going” experience was to be able to enjoy an ice-cold Coca-Cola and a big bag of buttery popcorn. Movie theater owners took notice, and over time, they steadily increased the availability and prices of their concession stand items. Many people would even say their prices have skyrocketed! As a result, numerous movie goers have resorted to feeling the need to sneak in their own snacks because they are simply unwilling to pay such outrageous prices. Consequently, this has created quite a controversy.
Hook: Added Information to "set up" the background information
Next week across America, millions of movie goers will flock to theaters to watch the highly anticipated rendition of Walt Disney’s classic Beauty and the Beast.. Upon entering theaters, many movie goers will be packing… but it’s not likely to be a 38 special. Instead, many will be stealthily harboring boxes of the ever popular M & Ms or some other favorite snack. Making a trip to the movies hit its height of popularity during the roaring 1920s. This particular time period was actually called the “Golden Age” of Hollywood. Because many American’s were experiencing the ramifications of the Great Depression, a trip to the movies was an especially great way to escape the headaches and worries of this difficult time period. Part of the movie going experience was to enjoy an ice-cold Coca-Cola and a big bag of buttery popcorn. Movie theater owners took notice, and over time, they steadily increased the availability and prices of their concession stand items. Many people would even argue their prices have skyrocketed! As a result, numerous movie goers have resorted to feeling the need to sneak in their own snacks because they are simply unwilling to pay such outrageous prices. Consequently, this has created quite a controversy.
Thesis Added - ALWAYS the LAST sentence of the introduction
Next week across America, millions of movie goers will flock to theaters to watch the highly anticipated rendition of Walt Disney’s classic Beauty and the Beast.. Upon entering theaters, many movie goers will be packing… but it’s not likely to be a 38 special. Instead, many will be stealthily harboring boxes of the ever popular M & Ms or some other favorite snack. Making a trip to the movies hit its height of popularity during the roaring 1920s. This particular time period was actually called the “Golden Age” of Hollywood. Because many American’s were experiencing the ramifications of the Great Depression, a trip to the movies was an especially great way to escape the headaches and worries of this difficult time period. Part of the movie going experience was to enjoy an ice-cold Coca-Cola and a big bag of buttery popcorn. Movie theater owners took notice, and over time, they steadily increased the availability and prices of their concession stand items. Many people would even argue their prices have skyrocketed! As a result, numerous movie goers have resorted to feeling the need to sneak in their own snacks because they are simply unwilling to pay such outrageous prices. Consequently, this has created quite a controversy. When people choose to bring in their own snacks it can cause theater ticket prices to increase significantly and it is against the rules; although some people believe smuggling snacks into theaters is a great way to save money, there are better options.
Is it okay to sneak food into the movies?
MLA
This site contains EVERYTHING you need to know about MLA format. It has wonderful samples of papers and works cited pages. Any question you have about MLA or citing sources can be answered by using this site.
SAMPLE MLA FORMAT
Adkerson 1
Your Name
Teacher's Name
Course Title
Due Date (5 October 2018)
Your Title Is Centered - Still Times New Roman Size 12
persuasive strategies poster
Power points
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sample outlines
This Sample Outline Does NOT Contain Commentary
Introduction
A. Surprisingly, only 21% of Americans have a tattoo
B. However, tattoos are becoming more commonly seen in our society, and despite their growing popularity, people have mixed feelings about them.
C. Getting a tattoo is never a good idea because they can lead to disease and regrets, and although some people believe they are a great way to express one’s self, there are other options.
I. Diseases
TS: When getting inked, contracting a serious and/or deadly disease is always a risk.
A. Hepatitis
1. Months or years of treatment
2. Shuts down liver
3. 16,000 new cases in 2015
4. May not be curable
B. HIV
1. Attacks the immune system.
2. 50,000 new cases annually
3. Deadly
CS: Not only can one contract a disease from getting a tattoo, but they can also come to regret it.
II. Regrets
TS: As if contracting a disease is not bad enough, studies show that most people who have a tattoo actually regret getting it.
A. Visual Barrier
1. Society views: negative, rebellious, immature, and unprofessional
2. No job/career – policy against hiring people with tattoos
B. People Change Their Minds
1. Tastes change
2. Dermatologist Amy Smith avg. 30 laser removals per month.
3. Removal painful & expensive
4. 10 percent of clientele is over 50 & simply regret immortalizing a person or event.
CS: Life can be filled with regrets; a tattoo does not have to be one of them.
III. Self-Expression
TS: Some people believe getting a tattoo is a great way to express one’s self; however, there are other options.
A. Hair style (Tell Me)
1. Color/dye it {Show Me: evidence, example, detail}
2. Length/cut
B. Clothing choice (Tell Me)
1. Preppy
2. Emo
CS: Expressing one’s self does not have to be limited to just a tattoo; there are numerous ways to express one’s personal style.
Conclusion
A. Thesis: Getting a tattoo is always the wrong choice because one can get diseases and he or she may come to regret it later; although some people believe they are a means to express one’s self, there are plenty of better alternatives.
B. Call to action: Everyone should rethink getting inked.
C. Predict future: One would not want a tattoo to ruin his or her future, so avoiding them is the way to ensure they do not negatively affect one’s future.
Introduction
A. Surprisingly, only 21% of Americans have a tattoo
B. However, tattoos are becoming more commonly seen in our society, and despite their growing popularity, people have mixed feelings about them.
C. Getting a tattoo is never a good idea because they can lead to disease and regrets, and although some people believe they are a great way to express one’s self, there are other options.
I. Diseases
TS: When getting inked, contracting a serious and/or deadly disease is always a risk.
A. Hepatitis
1. Months or years of treatment
2. Shuts down liver
3. 16,000 new cases in 2015
4. May not be curable
B. HIV
1. Attacks the immune system.
2. 50,000 new cases annually
3. Deadly
CS: Not only can one contract a disease from getting a tattoo, but they can also come to regret it.
II. Regrets
TS: As if contracting a disease is not bad enough, studies show that most people who have a tattoo actually regret getting it.
A. Visual Barrier
1. Society views: negative, rebellious, immature, and unprofessional
2. No job/career – policy against hiring people with tattoos
B. People Change Their Minds
1. Tastes change
2. Dermatologist Amy Smith avg. 30 laser removals per month.
3. Removal painful & expensive
4. 10 percent of clientele is over 50 & simply regret immortalizing a person or event.
CS: Life can be filled with regrets; a tattoo does not have to be one of them.
III. Self-Expression
TS: Some people believe getting a tattoo is a great way to express one’s self; however, there are other options.
A. Hair style (Tell Me)
1. Color/dye it {Show Me: evidence, example, detail}
2. Length/cut
B. Clothing choice (Tell Me)
1. Preppy
2. Emo
CS: Expressing one’s self does not have to be limited to just a tattoo; there are numerous ways to express one’s personal style.
Conclusion
A. Thesis: Getting a tattoo is always the wrong choice because one can get diseases and he or she may come to regret it later; although some people believe they are a means to express one’s self, there are plenty of better alternatives.
B. Call to action: Everyone should rethink getting inked.
C. Predict future: One would not want a tattoo to ruin his or her future, so avoiding them is the way to ensure they do not negatively affect one’s future.
sample papers
tell me vs. show me - Six flags example
Below is a SUPER SIMPLE example. Your writing would need to go into more depth, but the intent of this example is to show you the difference between TELL ME and SHOW ME sentences.
~ Main Idea
This past summer I spent one amazing day at Six Flags, and it's certainly a day I’ll never forget.
~ Tell Me
The best part of the whole Six Flags experience was the roller coasters.
~ Show Me ~ Details
The roller coasters are some of the tallest and fastest in entire world. The “Superman” was by far my favorite coaster because it went 157 m.p.h., had furious, wild turns that took my breath away. It made my body beg to do it again.
~ Tell Me
One of the other best attractions was the water park because it was the perfect way to cool off on such a hot, sticky August day.
~ Show Me ~ Details
The day I went to Six Flags it was a staggering 95 degrees and the cold, blue water splashing down on me gave me much needed relief from the torturous sun. The water not only soaked my clothes, but also my sunburned skin. It felt fabulous; when the ride came to a stop, I didn’t want to get off.
Conclusion
In the end, I did have to get off, and leave the park, but not before I had spent one fabulous day at Six Flags. I can’t wait to go back!
Here it is all together.
This past summer I spent one amazing day at Six Flags, and it's certainly a day I’ll never forget. The best part of the whole Six Flags experience was the roller coasters. The roller coasters are some of the tallest and fastest in entire world. The “Superman” was by far my favorite coaster because it went 157 m.p.h., had furious, wild turns that took my breath away. It made my body beg to do it again. One of the other best attractions was the water park because it was the perfect way to cool off on such a hot, sticky August day. The day I went to Six Flags it was a staggering 95 degrees and the cold, blue water splashing down on me gave me much needed relief from the torturous sun. The water not only soaked my clothes, but also my sunburned skin. It felt fabulous; when the ride came to a stop, I didn’t want to get off. In the end, I did have to get off, and leave the park, but not before I had spent one fabulous day at Six Flags. I can’t wait to go back!
~ Main Idea
This past summer I spent one amazing day at Six Flags, and it's certainly a day I’ll never forget.
~ Tell Me
The best part of the whole Six Flags experience was the roller coasters.
~ Show Me ~ Details
The roller coasters are some of the tallest and fastest in entire world. The “Superman” was by far my favorite coaster because it went 157 m.p.h., had furious, wild turns that took my breath away. It made my body beg to do it again.
~ Tell Me
One of the other best attractions was the water park because it was the perfect way to cool off on such a hot, sticky August day.
~ Show Me ~ Details
The day I went to Six Flags it was a staggering 95 degrees and the cold, blue water splashing down on me gave me much needed relief from the torturous sun. The water not only soaked my clothes, but also my sunburned skin. It felt fabulous; when the ride came to a stop, I didn’t want to get off.
Conclusion
In the end, I did have to get off, and leave the park, but not before I had spent one fabulous day at Six Flags. I can’t wait to go back!
Here it is all together.
This past summer I spent one amazing day at Six Flags, and it's certainly a day I’ll never forget. The best part of the whole Six Flags experience was the roller coasters. The roller coasters are some of the tallest and fastest in entire world. The “Superman” was by far my favorite coaster because it went 157 m.p.h., had furious, wild turns that took my breath away. It made my body beg to do it again. One of the other best attractions was the water park because it was the perfect way to cool off on such a hot, sticky August day. The day I went to Six Flags it was a staggering 95 degrees and the cold, blue water splashing down on me gave me much needed relief from the torturous sun. The water not only soaked my clothes, but also my sunburned skin. It felt fabulous; when the ride came to a stop, I didn’t want to get off. In the end, I did have to get off, and leave the park, but not before I had spent one fabulous day at Six Flags. I can’t wait to go back!
thesis Example
Thesis: topic + feeling about the topic + a preview of the main points
Should you get a tattoo? - NO
Example: Getting a tattoo is never a good idea because they can lead to diseases and regrets, and although some people believe they are a great way to express one’s self, there are other options.
Should you get a tattoo? - NO
Example: Getting a tattoo is never a good idea because they can lead to diseases and regrets, and although some people believe they are a great way to express one’s self, there are other options.